6. 修饰词和被修饰词要邻近

科技写作要求严谨,明确.为了严格定义一个事物,往往要加上限制性的修饰词或短句.比如描写实验用的 mice 时 , 一般不会只说 mice , 而是用类似 “NCI-H23 tumor bearing female athymic nude mice” 的描述 . 前面有5个修饰词来定义研究用的mice 这时一般把最窄的定义写在最前面,最广的定义写在后面.修饰语要靠近同被修饰的对象 . 因修饰语和被修饰的词被隔开, 而造成意思混乱的情况很多 . 下面是一些例 子 .

Inhibition of Acid B on xanthine oxidase was also reported.

Inhibition of 后面应紧跟 xanthine oxidase , 而不是 Acid B, 隔开后句子就很难读 .

宜改为: Inhibition of xanthine oxidase by Acid B was also reported.

The chelating activities for ferrous ion of the Acid B were assessed.

The chelating activities 后面应紧跟 Acid B , 而不是 ferrous ion.

宜改为: The chelating activities of the Acid B for ferrous ion were assessed.

Reducing power represents the electron donating capacity, which may serve as a significant indicator of potential antioxidant activity.

用 which 开头的修饰句 , 是要修饰 reducing power , 而不是修饰 electron donating capacity , 所以要紧跟在 reducing power 后面 .

宜改为: Reducing power, which may serve as a significant indicator of potential antioxidant activity, represents the electron donating capacity. 或 : Reducing power represents the electron donating capacity. It may serve as a significant indicator of potential antioxidant activity.

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